Slave-Trade Poetry

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My name is Joe and I'm a 15 year old male living in Melbourne, Australia. Currently i am learning about  African American history and the slave trade. We were told to give a presentation of our choice to show our knowledge of this topic and i decided to write a poem.. Any responses would be much appreciated and i would love any advice or criticism...

Thanks

History Project- Joe Strimling
Slavery Poem


INTRO:
My name was Kunta Kinta- at least to begin
A life being judged by the colour of my skin

When I reflect on my journey into a world of hurt
It’s hard to tell my story, being treated like dirt

But it started in Africa, as a young 17 year old man
A story of hardship and slavery, this is where it began

STORY:
We were taught by the elders, how to hunt and provide
We were taught to live with strength, honour and pride

These skills being taught to us, one, two, three
Was our plan for life and how it should be

But that all went away on that very fateful day
Ghosts, devils, demons is what they always say

They landed on-shore, with their knife and their gun
Me and some others, we were told to quickly run
So run we did, throughout the land
As the horrible ‘suited’ men, hit the sand

We were hunted like animals, for a day or two
Until there wasn’t much more that we could do

They found us eventually, tied us up by the neck
And the next thing we know, we were boarding the deck

No space, it’s all crampt, a metre maybe more
Some people being chained now, to the poles and the floor

The sickness that we experienced caused disease and death
Some people stayed silent, others screampt to their last breath

So much was uncertain, so much was unclear
So many exhausted, so many filled with fear

We’d been stripped from our home and shipped off for weeks
We’d barely been fed and the dead bodies began to wreak

Finally the day came, the ship had docked
We were pulled off the boat, our body still locked


By the steel shackles that bind together our freedom
These foolish white people really believe that we need them

But they know nothing of the people that we truly are
But nor did we of them, no, now we were too far

After a day or so of being kept in a cage
And being taunted by a white man, filled with rage

We started getting called out, one at a time
And put up on stage, surely you would think this is a crime

These men would come up, check our muscles, strength and teeth
It didn’t matter to any of them, what actually was beneath

Whatever we could do to satisfy their pleasures
We were bought and sold to increase these strangers’ treasures

A loud man shouts and screams ever so fast
Bidding us off, as the next African past

My name was called, Kunta-Kinta he said
This fast speaking man, this moment I dread


A big man stepped up and started to look
I seemed to have what he wanted, so me, he took

He pulled once more by the rope and the chain
Into his horse and carriage, in so much pain

I was taken to his farm, to his large plantation
And told “this is what you’ll do, here’s your work station”.

He pointed to a field of many many crop
So many to see, it just wouldn’t stop

I could see other workers, really working hard
In the cotton fields and out cleaning his yard

It was hard to accept this, what I had to do
Just believe in a better day- that’s all I knew

I was shown my living area, a farmhouse, some hay
A bucket for some food and livestock in the way

I would work the field all night and day
Until the hair on my head, all turned grey


So basically this was now my future, to do as I was told
Work all day in boiling heat, and sleeping out in the cold

This was ultimately my life, my story and my struggle
It was hard time for me; I had to watch my world crumble

There was nothing I could do, nothing really to achieve
So the best thing for me was just to believe

That a brighter day would come and we will all unite
And god will help these white men, all see the light

That all men are created equal and we can live together
In a peaceful, accepting land, forever and ever
Cordilow

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Ah,

This reminds me of Roots. That was a great miniseries—I recommend it if you haven't seen it (I haven't read the book yet, though).

I liked the poem. It was cool, and I think your class will appreciate it.

Some things stuck out a little to me, though.

It first seemed that there were two more syllables in some of the lines than needed, but as it went on a more complex pattern seemed to emerge. I might recommend rewording some of the longer phrases to make them flow better, if you could. If not, though, I'm sure the class will still like it. I'm just giving some advice to hone things—you can always try at least.

Anyway, another thing I noticed was that the language used didn't seem to hail from the culture at hand in the least (which might stick out in a first-person poem). I don't know if you're concerned about this at all, but it's good to know that some people will likely be thinking about it.

> It was hard time for me
I think there's an article missing in this sentence.

Anyway, that was about it.

Thanks for posting! Feel free to comment on some of the other poetry in here, too (it helps to get other people to respond and become more active forum members—they might even reply to yours again).

Thanks for telling us about the poem and what you needed. A lot of people just post poems with no explanations whatsoever (and it's hard to critique those). Oh, if a person who did that is reading this, please reply to your post and tell us more about it!—and/or what you want from us. It helps—a lot.