Wow . . . no time for love . . .
It's sad to see people get so busy, but it does seem that it might be happening to many.
Education is important and all - but a career is not life itself (or, it shouldn't be, at least - I think).
It seems that the poem indicates people, as they grow old, are spending their time on worldly things, and cheap imitations of what could be lasting pleasures, instead of what really matters. I mean, they try to fit the important things in the schedule of the less important things. Priorities. Yeah - such is an issue of our day . . . not only with education, but with many other aspects of life, it seems. It seems to indicate that life was different as a child. Kids know what's up, apparently - well, they know what's important, at least (or they're innocent of what's not important, anyway, in many regards).
Drinking wine from paper cups seems symbolic because wine seems a little extravagant for paper cups.
It's like they're getting at the riches, but they're doing it at the sacrifice of other things - I might have switched the symbols around, though: I mean, have some cheap substance in a fancy glass, as the drinking of the wine is what seems to be the more important thing (without taking into account what it probably means, at least). Actually, with the symbols how they are, that makes more sense, if you do not value wine yourself (I personally don't value it).
I like how it glamorizes youth - I think that is definitely appropriate for this song, if I'm understanding it correctly.
Note the typo the second time the chorus comes around:
> the the beer cans
I don't understand the latter part of the chorus, about mom and dad being empty. I mean, I don't know what that means, yet.
The sun running away and the moon coming is cool. Nice lead-in to what comes next (although it's not directly associated in the song, it seems).
What's the genre for the music you have, will have or want to have, with this? Is it the same tune for both verses? Have you got it worked out how the lyrics fit? I know it's often hard to apply specific meters with contemporary music, as is done with hymns.
P.S. Someone rated you low - it might be because of the alcohol references, deeming it as objectional content; if this is the case, perhaps they wouldn't have done it if you noted that at the beginning of your post (you can always edit it and mention that, if you prefer). I don't know, maybe they just didn't like it, or something: who knows? I thought the message I got out of the song was cool, myself (though I am against drinking and all, but it doesn't seem that the song is in particular favor of it, either; I suppose I could have misinterpreted it, though).
