New to this Forum looking for lyric citique

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averagjo

New to this Forum looking for lyric citique

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Hi I am new to this forum but I have been writing for years and I don't commonly share my songs but i wanted to see what other people thought of them so here goes another

I am getting closer to you (but I’m getting further away from myself)

1st Verse
Since I’ve met you my life’s been changing

Seems that everything has been rearranging

Given up my friends and my casual acquaintances

Traded it in for these new situations

Chorus  

I’ve been getting closer to you I said

I’ve been getting closer to you I said

I’ve been getting closer you

But I’m getting further away from myself


2nd Verse
Given up my dreams and the plans I was making

Bought right in to these chances I’m taking

Hoping somehow that I won’t be mistaken

Not knowing for sure that my heart won’t be breaking


Chorus  

I’ve been getting closer to you I said

I’ve been getting closer to you I said

I’ve been getting closer you

But I’m getting further away from myself


Bridge

This road I am on may be hard and long and I’m not sure about the detours

But I hope some how I can figure it out and know that your love is for sure



3rd Verse

Well I’m not so secure that this all is worth it

I’ve got my doubts that your love is a sure fit

I saw you last night with the guy you were dating

And it wasn’t me and that’s why I’m debating


Chorus

Whether I should be getting closer to you

Whether I should be getting closer to you

Whether I should be getting closer to you

And be getting further away from myself

Chorus  to end

I’ve been getting closer to you I said

I’ve been getting closer to you I said

I’ve been getting closer you

But I’m getting further away from myself


singme2

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Seems R&b, Is that intended?
Lyrics have pretty good flow, the only glitch to me is the Acquaintances ~ situations match.