Life is but a Journey

[Kohlycakes]

This life is but a journey
A destination unknown
We proudly follow one another
No spirit to be shown

But in a land of cold and gray
a child will be born
as songs are sung of battles won
his father starts to mourn

a birth defect, impurity
exile waits for him
and to his death, he will be sent
he fights a battle he can't win

Pinch me it's a nightmare,
but the shadow must soon fade
I start to think its cliché,
that you will rue the day

Still he breathes, and reaches out
for a hand that he cant find
to pull him up, out of his past
of never ending lies

His grip will fail, and he will fall
back to when he was a child
back when thoughts of giving up
plagued his mind every day

Pinch me it's a nightmare,
but the shadow must soon fade
I start to think its cliché,
that you will rue the day

[SuperMe]

I like the words, and I assume its sort of a dim outlook on life (although the end confuses me, and I'm not sure what the whole "cliche" part is about).  But speaking of which, the title is sort of cliche... way too cliche for something that itself is actually really good.  Now that I think of it, the first verse is sort of mediocre and bland.  Sounds like something on a poster in a middle school.  But otherwise I like it :)  Hope this helps!

[wordsareheard]

I noticed as the lyric progresses so does the character's life. The sequence of events are chronilogical and builds suspense throughout. However, this piece as a whole is a bit difficult for me to understand precisely. I read it three times but id have to read it few more to try to understand more. I do believe the stanza where the event "the grip faling" is said and some other events contain "a deep outlook on life" that corresponds to your title. your look is YOUR own unique interpretation on "Life as a journey" I respect that. Overall, Nice piece. Feel free to return the favor and critique my work. Thanks, Chris