5 minute writing exercise - March

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Dawn Coyote () 5 minute writing exercise - March
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Daily 5: March

ETA: I just saw the note from the author requiring permission to repost.

See the daily 5 at the link above.
Dawn Coyote () Re: 5 minute writing exercise
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March 28 "Image Patterning, Starting with Jell-O"

The Jell-O was not his favorite dessert, but he scooped a spoonful of it into his mouth and grinned. The sugar-free variety tasted much the same as the regular kind, and he didn’t mind it as much as he thought he would. He didn’t mind the overcooked steaks, either, or the barking dog next door that had been at it since he arrived, or the fact that she was wearing enough perfume to make his nose itch.

He watched her cut an acorn-shaped piece out of the Jell-O with her spoon, slip it into her mouth, and squish it with her tongue. He watched her swallow it with her eyes closed, and he let his gaze trail down the long line of her throat to the swell of her breasts above her white tank top. He glanced behind her at the overstuffed blue velvet couch, and thought that he could learn to like Jell-O.
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Of course I realized now, after a few hours that I basically rewrote yours with different characters.  So I'm going to try to do it again, with a little distance from reading yours.
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It's hard to get a story in with all those details, and mine was about eros, while yours was about a bored father, I thought. By all means try it again. Maybe I will, too.

ETA: It would be fun to write it as famous characters, like H.S. Thompson (shoots the dog), Charles Bukowski (mixes Jell-O with rum, passes out on couch), etc.

I edited the top post to include the whole month of March. I'll start a new thread for April.
artandsoul () Re: Dawn-
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Oh goody!!!

Yes, I was going for an elderly father in the throes of his daughter's "care."

But upon reflection it just seemed a poor riff on your more eloquent short.

Very good stuff - I'm all for it!  (cracking knuckles)  Can't wait til Wednesday!

I have a "Writer's Retreat" deck that has some excellent prompts - I'd be happy to do some in May if you like.
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March 29 "Body Language: Two People Talking"

He talks fast with his head down, fidgeting with the cutlery, his napkin, the tent card that announces Choconut Eruption is the dessert special of the day.
She sets her coffee cup in the saucer carefully.
His gaze meets hers for a moment and then skitters away.
He’s talking faster now.
Her mouth twists in a humourless smile, but he is busy with the saltshaker and doesn’t see it.
He spins the saltshaker on its edge and it tips over, spilling salt in an arc on the plastic tablecloth.
He brushes at the salt. It makes a crunching noise on the plastic.
She pinches a few salt crystals between her forefinger and thumb, and throws them over her shoulder.
She gets up, smooths down gray pencil skirt, and walks out. Salt crunches under her shoes.
Dawn Coyote () Re: Dawn-
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These aren't mine. I get them from the link at the top of the top post.

I was thinking I'd do one a day, but that's unlikely, so I'll do the ones I feel like doing, when I feel like doing them.

Add yours anywhere you like, a&s. The more, the merrier.

It is fun, isn't it? I enjoyed doing the body language list.


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March 12 "Ten Hands"
Describe five different pairs of hands. (Some things to consider might be color; teture; shape; symmetry; condition; scars; tattoos; jewlery; etc.) For each pair of hands assign a name and a profession.

Nanny’s Working Hands.
Her hands were rough, with yellowed nails from years of smoking Pall Malls. There were calluses on the fingers from holding rakes and hoes and there were burn marks, scratches and scars from everything she had ever laid her hands on – frying pans filled with spurting oil, barbed wire fencing to be unwound from a horse’s frail leg, scrapes against the rocks from digging the graves of her three dead babies. Now these hands, holding each other together for eternity, lay still…locked against her chest as she lies in the coffin.

Bob’s Fighting Hands.
His hands are stout-fingered and brown with sun. They are the strong hands of a laborer, a brick layer, a fisherman, a man who can do anything.  Hard talking, hard living, hard working this man has used these hands to batter noses and break cheekbones in pre-dawn barfights, when only a slight blue bruise the next day would give it away. One hard, brown hand curls softly around the elbow of his wife of 50 years as she shuffles down the hall…the other drags the IV pole.  No one speaks.

Marion’s Teaching Hands.
These marvelous hands trail through the air as she talks, weaving invisible links between her words so that I can grasp them like a blanket and wrap them around my life.  Her long arms and bony wrists stretch into many-fingered bouquets of hands working like birdsong to carry a message to my untrained ear.  My eyes follow the movements and something shifts in my brain.  I can see her index finger tracing the arc of my dream.

His Comforting Hands.
Oh, his hands, strong and big and masculine, are the hands that have comforted for 25 years.  The weight and depth and breadth of his hands fits perfectly over the hole her childhood left in her heart.  These hands with their square palms and sturdy, elegant fingers stem the flow of blood and hold her still until she can regroup, replenish and revive.  He has no idea the way her heart leaps at the sight of these hands, even now with the nodules and bumps of rheumatoid arthritis, the crippling of knuckle and the freezing of the pinky she can still run her fingers lightly over these hands and feel the love and the care and the protection they have given her.

A Daughter’s Art.
Her hands are the softest human hands I have ever felt. The flesh is always warm and moist, like ripe fruit and her fingers are graceful in their construction and brilliant in their dexterity.  Usually covered in graphite, paint, ink and charcoal these hands are still small and almost childlike.  The right hand curls into itself with the thumb extended ready to calm the quiet child within.  Seeing her suck her thumb, even now, causes my heart to lurch with a love that knows no bounds.
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March 30 "Improbable Rescue"

A week after his funeral, after the extra-wide coffin containing his six hundred and fifty-eight pound remains had been lowered into the ground, Ashley went to her father’s apartment to pack up his things.

Most of the suite’s surface area was buried under fast food containers, empty soda bottles and other detritus, but the kitchen was oddly pristine by comparison. Except for the garbage, which overflowed with empty cream cheese tubs, mayonnaise bottles, and the wrappers of more than a dozen packages of frozen spinach — evidence of his recent “diet” — it was the cleanest room in the place.

In the sink, Ashley discovered a device which resembled a small wine press with dried pieces of chopped spinach stuck to it. She took it home and tried it out, and was tickled to discover it produced compact balls of wrung-out spinach with little effort. She took it to a manufacturer who built her a factory prototype, and she filed for a patent.

Her father’s insurance provided enough money for an infomercial, and hostesses everywhere snatched up the Spinach Squish faster than you can say “sourdough bread bowl.”
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March 31 - Once upon a time

Once upon a time there was a girl named Zoe who lived in a village on the edge of the forest. When she wasn’t helping out in the community gardens, Zoe’s favorite thing to do was to practice playing her violin, which she would do for many hours every day. She practiced so hard and became so good at it that eventually the village council took a vote and offered to send her to the city to study. Zoe was sad to leave her mother and father behind, but she was glad that her best friend could go with her. Zoe’s best friend was a purple cat named Aubergine.